Know me.
It's your smile that folds me.
Your eyes mold me.
Your hands told me.
These bars can't hold me.
Reality with the duality
of equality
can't hold me down.
No longer will these bars hold me.

Know me. It's your smile that folds me. Your eyes mold me. Your hands told me. These bars can't hold me. Reality with the duality of equality can't hold me down. No longer will these bars hold me. |
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this shit is bananas, B-A-N-A-N-A-S!
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-ODB
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-ODB
you caught me!
the photo is the grill to a pt cruiser.
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-ODB
Bravo
I really like this, the way the rhythm changes half way and your choice of words seem just right.
Only one thing that seems a little off is that you use the word "hold" twice in the last two lines, which seems to take away the emphasis from the last line. but then again, i see no other way in which it would fit..
A great poem i would say
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-ODB
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