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Know me.
It's your smile that folds me.
Your eyes mold me.
Your hands told me.
These bars can't hold me.
Reality with the duality
of equality
can't hold me down.
No longer will these bars hold me.
©2004-2009 *addem
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:icontakirasun:
*tear* beautfil

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this shit is bananas, B-A-N-A-N-A-S!
:iconsweetrocknroller:
stunning- romantic but nt trivial...
:iconaddem:
thanks :)

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:bored::megaphone: "Jacques Cousteau could never get this low.."
-ODB
:iconaddem:
thank you :)

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:bored::megaphone: "Jacques Cousteau could never get this low.."
-ODB
:iconcaitlong:
I think this might be one of my favorites in your gallery. I really love the rhythm it has. Beautiful piece. :+fav: (I like the accompanying photo too. Looks like the grill of a car)
:iconaddem:
thanks for the fav. :love:
you caught me!
the photo is the grill to a pt cruiser.

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:bored::megaphone: "Jacques Cousteau could never get this low.."
-ODB
:iconbeizebopp:
Very nice :thumbsup:
Bravo :)
I really like this, the way the rhythm changes half way and your choice of words seem just right.
Only one thing that seems a little off is that you use the word "hold" twice in the last two lines, which seems to take away the emphasis from the last line. but then again, i see no other way in which it would fit..

A great poem i would say :) well done.
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you are too kind. thank you.

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:bored::megaphone: "Jacques Cousteau could never get this low.."
-ODB

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